WHERE ANGELS PLAYED
I came upon my God one blessd night,And down upon my knees, so quick to bend,Myself in awe, but oh! to comprehend!Upon such wonder gazed the neophyte,Whereat the heaven`s range, in pure delight,The...
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Okay, you're posting lots of sonnets, so the standards go up a bit. This section needs some verbs:<I came upon my God one blessd night,And down upon my knees, so quick to bend,Myself in awe, but...
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Thank you Zeke,I will definitely give this some serious consideration.Nothing like learning from a pro, as it were...
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Back after long hiatus, lots of new members I see.Thoreau,Your sonnet looks Italian, and the sestet rhyme pattern appears to be cdcdee, which according to my resources is a no-no: "In strict practice,...
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Hi Leah,Thank you so much for such an elaborate critique.I have a whole lot to learn, and you know your stuff.This was the very first sonnet I ever wrote, and I had no idea about form, I must confess....
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I could really go to town on this one: so many flaws, so many problems.However, it works as a poem, and the close is to die for, as it were, so I'll leave well alone.Small nit: "Would" should be...
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I'm sure this would have gone down a storm in a Victorian drawing room, but why someone would want to write a sonnet in this style in the 21st century escapes me. I spoke to God, and said,In words I...
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Thoreau,Honestly, I think Maz hit it with the Victorian Drawing Room comment. This is old fashioned, which is delicious to some minds, dreadfully stale to others. Having there be the joke in the end...
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Hi guys, This was my very first attempt at writing sonnets, a form I had no knowledge of at all. English is my second language. And to set the record straight, I am not in the least Christian.For all...
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Perhaps you are referring to the treatment of other beginners. Your poems have been commented on usefully and to the point, and with more tact than most beginners here get. Unfortunately, the one...
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